===> Be the olive-blooded alligator troll.
Your name is KASULI TOVARA and today is your WRIGGLING DAY, your what? You never really cared much to remember how exactly you were so fortunate as to survive the caverns, but you’re here now.
Besides the point, you’re too busy thinking about your INTERESTS. You take a keen interest in SCALEBEASTS, causing you to have a STRONG AFFECTION for your lucus. You also like to read about ALTERNIAN HEROES from the past, specifically those who set out to aid in CONQUERING PLANETS. When you are of age, you dream of joining the ranks of the CAVALREAPERS. Sometimes you like to practice with your REALLY SHITTY WORN OUT LANCE, only to end up whacking your enemies or beasts with it instead of impaling them, when that fails, you tend to use your RUSTY YET RELIABLE POLEARM that you’ve had for a couple of sweeps.
Sometimes you like leaving the safety of your hive to meet up with some of your troll friends….what friends? Oh that’s right you DON’T SEEM TO HAVE ANY as of now and instead tend to STRIFE WITH YOUR LUCUS most of the time. Your trolltag is ammutCrusader, why you have it you don’t know, its not like anyone will be chatting with you.
Quirk: “^v^v Yov tend to tvpe like thif v^v^” replacing any letter with a V whenever you can to represent teeth, as well as place “^v^v” before and after your sentences as if it were a toothy alligator mouth, sometimes, but rarely, you tend to use faces like owo whenever eager or excited or :F to represent your protruding teeth, and also replace all S’s with F because your teeth cause you to make “F” sounds whenever you “fpeak and fo it goef like thif”
Some Notes:
Strife specibus: lancekind, polearm kind
-Carries around a polearm whenever he is unable to properly use a lance in a fight, as well as preferring to try and stay at a distance when fighting.
God Tier: thief of heart
-I chose this tier because when around trusted “others” he becomes too gullible, or will do anything to help his allies, and so I thought that this would challenge him to try and learn to help himself since being “too helpful” has caused him to get into several problems
Lucus: A large alligator, about the size of an adult horse, has extended arms and legs so that it can get around more quickly. Has a stronger upper body than its legs and lower body and so uses its arms to walk around like a gorilla. Is naturally blind, emitting small croaks and sometimes high pitched yelps to help locate where it is going like a bat.
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You’ve got a pretty solid start here. You’ve done a pretty thorough job in theming this troll, and I don’t really see any technical problems. His personality is good, his quirk is readable, his sprite is adorable.
One thing I will say is that his fetch modus is too literal. A modus is a more abstract thing, and wouldn’t, as far as I’m concerned, be able to simulate biting, especially not to a degree that might kill the operator. I would revise this troll’s modus and try not to be so literal this go around.
In my understanding, a Thief of Heart would be able to manipulate the relationships/emotions of other players in a way that benefits him. In the case of this troll, I can see why you chose Thief—instead of benefitting others, it benefits the player. But Heart seems sort of…ill-fit? The way you’ve portrayed him is as someone who is a kind of loner, so I can see how Heart would be a challenging aspect. But I think that his being so incredibly helpful makes Heart an almost too-obvious choice. If you really want to challenge him, Thief of Mind seems to fit a little bit better, at least in my eyes.
ONE MORE THING! Protip: the proper spelling is L-U-S-U-S. Not “lucus”.
That’s all I got! You’re off to a great start so just keep hammering out the details and you’ll be all set. Thanks for submitting!
- Mod Cait
![Review - Tadrin Tenuex
==> Be the creepy fetishist.
Your name is TADRIN TENUEX, and you are NOT a fetishist. At least, you don’t want to admit it. You will allow the use of “creepy”, nevertheless. Chuckle. You are actually fond of your natural HEIGHT. However, when you (quite rarely) venture out into public, others often point at you and mutter to themselves asking whether or not your height was a HATCH MUTATION. Your lankiness even causes many to mistake you for TREES. It’s hard for you to brush this off; you usually take these as serious insults. Ironically, you love trees to death. Especially those of the CONIFER family. In fact, your hive is situated a bit far from communal areas, in a rather dense forest of many varieties of needle-bearers. Several of your blocks are decorated with POTTED PINE SAPLINGS, which you tend to like a lusus.
You spend a large portion of your time going onto the Internet to read SPOOKY STORIES conjured up by low-class baseblock dwellers and several fright-inducing videos on GrubTube. You find a lot of these to be yawn-worthy, but there’s a particular story that you absolutely consecrate, and it scares your horns off at every mention. It has even, in fact, shaped your beliefs. At your happiest times, you always sense a thin sliver of OMINOUSNESS in the atmosphere, probably caused by the immensely weak PSYCHIC POWERS unusual for you to have at your place on the hemospectrum. You also have a thing for young trolls. Not with MALICIOUS or HARASSMENT-RELATED thoughts in mind! Why would anyone think that. You have tried to befriend some 5-sweep-olds through instant messaging and randomly punched phone numbers, but their lusii are ALWAYS disgusted by you, and even if you were able to meet these youngsters, they’d probably be intimidated by your height. For this reason, you prefer to live in the middle of SCENIC NOWHERE, after a lot of shaming and escaping persecution by misconstrued others who though you were some disturbed GRUBNAPPER.
Most of the time you call yourself a CONFIDENT troll, but this is only to mask your true personality. You suffer serious PARANOIA, which you try to do your best to keep contained. At rare moments however you are driven so hard into fear that you keep yourself AWAY FROM COMMUNICATION with anyone for extended periods of time— sometimes your own guardian.
Your trolltag is macilentHeretics and you c✕nverse in ways that ✕thers find ridicul✕usly eg✕tistical. ≈:]
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Name: Tadrin Tenuex (Tadrin scrambled from the Radiata pine, tenuex from tenuis, Latin for thin/weak)
Age: 8.3 sweeps Blood: Tealish-jade (#0b5e55)
Horns: Meant to look like wavy appendages, but also happen to resemble the letter S. :|
Symbol: Tensor product/crossed out circle
Ancestor: The Operator (*snrrk*)
Lusus: Giant stingbeast/bald-faced hornet
Strife Weapon: Ropekind (and occasionally, grapnelkind)
Quirk: Replaces Os with Xs. Emoticons consist of wavy lines for his horns and bracket mouths.
Planet: Land of Vines and Approximation. Consorts are golden tortoises.
~~ At last it has arrived, a Slenderman-based fantroll. I shall await your headdesks of disgust. I hope he’s not as obnoxious as in theory, he’s my first. unu”
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First off, really digging the sprite, it’s well done! Second off, REALLY DIGGING THE TROLL, OH MAN. I was ready to totally hate this and then I didn’t.
Huge fan of the thought you put into the horns and his interests and general design. He’s not overdone or obnoxious and he’s the perfect level of homage to not be too derivative. I think the thing where he’s constantly trying to get in touch with kids is hilarious. The quirk is perfect for his sign and very readable. Name looks good. The mostly-impotent psychic power is a-ok for a tealblood.
He’s rather old, you might want to consider conscription-related issues and account for them.
Really I don’t have much to criticize about this at all! I was expecting it to be terrible, and I was pleasantly surprised. Thanks for submitting and have a lot of fun with him. I’d get a real kick out of roleplaying with him.
- Jake](http://25.media.tumblr.com/33358760e217d30fbb0ee25da23e388d/tumblr_mfdo5inNlZ1r3268bo1_250.jpg)
Review - Tadrin Tenuex
==> Be the creepy fetishist.
Your name is TADRIN TENUEX, and you are NOT a fetishist. At least, you don’t want to admit it. You will allow the use of “creepy”, nevertheless. Chuckle. You are actually fond of your natural HEIGHT. However, when you (quite rarely) venture out into public, others often point at you and mutter to themselves asking whether or not your height was a HATCH MUTATION. Your lankiness even causes many to mistake you for TREES. It’s hard for you to brush this off; you usually take these as serious insults. Ironically, you love trees to death. Especially those of the CONIFER family. In fact, your hive is situated a bit far from communal areas, in a rather dense forest of many varieties of needle-bearers. Several of your blocks are decorated with POTTED PINE SAPLINGS, which you tend to like a lusus.
You spend a large portion of your time going onto the Internet to read SPOOKY STORIES conjured up by low-class baseblock dwellers and several fright-inducing videos on GrubTube. You find a lot of these to be yawn-worthy, but there’s a particular story that you absolutely consecrate, and it scares your horns off at every mention. It has even, in fact, shaped your beliefs. At your happiest times, you always sense a thin sliver of OMINOUSNESS in the atmosphere, probably caused by the immensely weak PSYCHIC POWERS unusual for you to have at your place on the hemospectrum. You also have a thing for young trolls. Not with MALICIOUS or HARASSMENT-RELATED thoughts in mind! Why would anyone think that. You have tried to befriend some 5-sweep-olds through instant messaging and randomly punched phone numbers, but their lusii are ALWAYS disgusted by you, and even if you were able to meet these youngsters, they’d probably be intimidated by your height. For this reason, you prefer to live in the middle of SCENIC NOWHERE, after a lot of shaming and escaping persecution by misconstrued others who though you were some disturbed GRUBNAPPER.
Most of the time you call yourself a CONFIDENT troll, but this is only to mask your true personality. You suffer serious PARANOIA, which you try to do your best to keep contained. At rare moments however you are driven so hard into fear that you keep yourself AWAY FROM COMMUNICATION with anyone for extended periods of time— sometimes your own guardian.
Your trolltag is macilentHeretics and you c✕nverse in ways that ✕thers find ridicul✕usly eg✕tistical. ≈:]
—
Name: Tadrin Tenuex (Tadrin scrambled from the Radiata pine, tenuex from tenuis, Latin for thin/weak)
Age: 8.3 sweeps Blood: Tealish-jade (#0b5e55)
Horns: Meant to look like wavy appendages, but also happen to resemble the letter S. :|
Symbol: Tensor product/crossed out circle
Ancestor: The Operator (*snrrk*)
Lusus: Giant stingbeast/bald-faced hornet
Strife Weapon: Ropekind (and occasionally, grapnelkind)
Quirk: Replaces Os with Xs. Emoticons consist of wavy lines for his horns and bracket mouths.
Planet: Land of Vines and Approximation. Consorts are golden tortoises.
~~ At last it has arrived, a Slenderman-based fantroll. I shall await your headdesks of disgust. I hope he’s not as obnoxious as in theory, he’s my first. unu”
—
First off, really digging the sprite, it’s well done! Second off, REALLY DIGGING THE TROLL, OH MAN. I was ready to totally hate this and then I didn’t.
Huge fan of the thought you put into the horns and his interests and general design. He’s not overdone or obnoxious and he’s the perfect level of homage to not be too derivative. I think the thing where he’s constantly trying to get in touch with kids is hilarious. The quirk is perfect for his sign and very readable. Name looks good. The mostly-impotent psychic power is a-ok for a tealblood.
He’s rather old, you might want to consider conscription-related issues and account for them.
Really I don’t have much to criticize about this at all! I was expecting it to be terrible, and I was pleasantly surprised. Thanks for submitting and have a lot of fun with him. I’d get a real kick out of roleplaying with him.
- Jake
Your name is RAZIEL NAVAAR, and y- wait, where did you go?
