caligo scurra

name:caligo scurra
age: 9 solar sweeps(17 earth years give or take)
sign: libra
sylladex type: array modus
strife specibus: sword kind
weapon of choice: hyacintho lamina (blue blade)
blood color: candy red
ancestor: The VagaBond
trollian handle:ArmageddonEquilizer(AE)
typing quirk: doouublees aall vooweells
title: chief of void
prospit dreamer
lusus: giant fucking dragon aka dracodad
friends: terezi, sollux, saccularius
moirall (official):Vencent Lupin/Launa Mato
matesprit(official)-Zeke Medy
kismesis:none
hobbies: smithing, cooking, training, tv, hunting

Q: Nope!  There are already read flags I can see here! The first is the sign, since this is (as I assume) a troll not in a fansession, you’re troll should definitely not have the libra (terezi’s) sign on his shirt.  Having a sign that is the same as another troll means that they’re very similar!  This is pretty bad if it’s in relation to canon characters the most.  

The second I see is the blood color; while there is nothing wrong with a mutant blood, you should definitely not compare them to a canon’s blood, nor should, if it’s mutant (and the only mutant is karkat) be the same blood color.  If you want another mutant blood character, just change it!

The next isn’t as big of a deal, but I feel that it should be mentioned.  The trolltag seems as if it was just randomly generated!  Armageddons are usually hectic and to equal two Armageddons is just madness!  You’ve stated your troll is peaceful, so this should definitely be changed.

The last is obvious contact with canon trolls!  I would not recommend officially putting canon trolls down as friends, though if they develop a friendship in a role-play is fine.  But it should /stay/ in the role-play.

caligo is a somewhat peaceful troll, often polite and courteous around other trolls. he is a mutant blood, like karkat. he is unsually STRONG, a trait passed down from his ancestor, THE VAGABOND, who was a descendent of THE SUFFERER. caligo enjoys spending time with his dragon lusus, who taught him how to fight, smith, and cook. he looks up to him as a role model of sorts, often going to him for advice. caligo, while usually peaceful, becomes a bit dangerous when enraged, sometimes killing those who anger him. his moiralls are VENCENT LUPIN and LAUNA MATO, however, launa and caligo were at first semi-kismesises, although, caligo scarred him after having his way with him in bed. caligo, for this reason, is often known as THE DEMON OF THE BED, for his extreme roughness. Launa promptly tried to end his own life after that, but caligo patched him up. after sometime, and a homecooked meal and a few shooshpaps, they became moiralls. an interesting thing to take note of is that cal and launa share the same quirk, almost the same blood color, and both have dragon lusii. this coincidence led to their first qaurell. not much has been done with lupin yet. his matesprit is ZEKE MEDY, a teal highblood who while an aristocrat, is a bit immature, which leads to caligo shooshpapping him often, as a way to calm him down. their relationship is very strong, and they care for each other very much. cal’s specibi are the FISTKIND and BLADEKIND, which he uses often. cal has realized his role as a hero of the void and uses the powers in ways not thougt possible. he is able to create a void in the space around him, destroying objects, or sucking up attacks. he can also cause a vacuum around him, causing his opponents to suffocate. he uses this when fighting, creating a void at the point of impact with his fist or sword, litterally creating a hole in his enemy, which coupled with his immense STRENGTH, can be quite deadly. his use of void closely resembles heroes of space and heroes of wind, albeit only in the destructive side of the spectrum.he can also faze out parts of his body on contact, an ability know as, the fade.

Q: Beep beep!! Red flag!  Do not make your troll related to the Sufferer!  This is Karkat’s ancestor, and it should /stay/ that way.  Give your troll’s ancestor his own story!

If you’re going to make your troll peaceful, keep with that theme! Making him peaceful and then killing when enraged is a bad idea!  This sounds too much like soperslime!Gamzee and sober!Gamzee.

I didn’t notice this before, but you’re troll cannot have two trolls filling a quadrant at a time!  One troll must die or leave that quadrant before another enters!  Launa’s and Caligo’s becoming of moirails is very weird and probably not accurate!  Remember, troll culture is very much more violent then the humans’!  If anything, after Caligo “had his way with him”, Launa would probably have more incentive to become a kismesis of his.  And they definitely should not share the same quirk or lusus, or even (almost) blood color!! It’s probably way more uncommon to find someone with the same blood (or similar bloods) then your birthday.

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